Story premise is the foundation of all good books. It’s the fundamental kernel of the beginning idea. But it’s more than that. If you can craft a solid story premise right from the beginning of your writing process, you will be able to capture all the concrete details necessary to bring your story to life.
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As most of you probably know, I’m a tremendous advocate of outlines. As such, the premise is always my starting point for creating a full-fledged outline of every story I write. But even if you’re the freewheeling sort who prefers not to create detailed outlines before writing the first draft, a solid story premise can offer you a mini-outline capable of guiding and informing everything you write.
This is why you should always go that extra mile with your premise. If you settle for vague cliches in your story premise, you’ll inevitably end up with a vague and cliched story. Before you ever sit down to write your opening line, take a moment to identify the six elements required by any premise–and take another moment to figure out how to make those elements so entirely awesome they take your breath away.
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Story Premise Element #1: Protagonist
Every story starts with character–and not just any character, but the character.
- Whose emotional and physical journey will you be following?
- Who has the most at stake?
- Whom do you find the most interesting?
- Who inspired this plot?
- Or–if the plot idea came first–who will be most suited to taking full advantage of its possibilities?
Story Premise Element #2: Situation
Situation is the first kernel of your plot. This is the status quo in which your protagonist finds himself in the beginning of the story.
- What is the hero’s personal condition at the beginning?
- How will that condition be changed, for better or worse, by the hero himself or by the antagonistic force?
Story Premise Element #3: Objective
A protagonist has no business showing on the page without an objective. If he doesn’t want something and want it badly enough to do just about anything to achieve it over the next couple hundred pages, then he doesn’t deserve to have a story told about him.
- At the beginning of the story, what does the hero want?
- What moral (or immoral) choice is he going to have to make in his attempt to gain that objective?
Story Premise Element #4: Opponent
Even an awesome character with a passionate goal isn’t enough to drive a story. For that, you need conflict, and before you can even consider conflict, you have to create an antagonistic force that can stand in the way of your protagonist’s objective.
- Who is your story’s opponent?
- How is this person or entity standing in the way of the hero achieving his objective?
Story Premise Element #5: Disaster
The first quarter of your story will allow you to set up your characters and their world. But something dramatic has to happen at the First Plot Point to force them into action. Usually, this moment will be a comparatively disastrous one that destroys your protagonist’s Normal World or estranges him from it.
- What will be the disaster?
- How will it be the result of the protagonist’s attempts to achieve his objective up to this point?
- How will the protagonist respond?
- How will the antagonistic force respond?
Story Premise Element #6: Conflict
All of a sudden, you almost have yourself a story. All that remains is to see where your characters’ reactions to the disaster in the First Plot Point lead them.
- What’s the story’s main conflict?
- How is it a result of the hero’s reaction to the disaster?
- How will it pit the protagonist and the antagonistic force at cross purposes?
- What is the logical flow of cause and effect that will allow this conflict to continue throughout the story?
Creating the Two-Sentence Story Premise
Now that you’ve gained a better an idea of the possibilities for your story, you’re ready to write your premise. In two sentences, you’re going to produce a premise similar to these:
Orphaned gypsy Heathcliff (protagonist) grows up to love (objective) his adopted sister Cathy (situation), but when Cathy (opponent) marries her wealthy neighbor (disaster), Heathcliff sets in motion a terrible vengeance that will pit him against everyone he knows (conflict). (Wuthering Heights by Emily Brontë)
Restless farm boy (situation) Luke Skywalker (protagonist) wants nothing more than to leave home and become a starfighter pilot, so he can live up to his mysterious father (objective). But when his aunt and uncle are murdered (disaster) after purchasing renegade droids, Luke must free the droids’ beautiful owner and discover a way to stop (conflict) the evil Empire (opponent) and its apocalyptic Death Star. (Star Wars: A New Hope directed by George Lucas)
And just like that you have a solid story premise on which to build your entire book!
If you find yourself struggling to construct the actual sentences, take a second look at your original answers. Could any of them be strengthened to be more specific or original? A good story premise is worth spending some time on. In the end, you will have emerged possibly having identified and eliminated structural weaknesses and definitely having created a valuable tool for outlining and pitching your novel.
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Great post. I love your lay out of it. I have seen this put together many ways before, but I really like yours. I also really like the aesthetics of your post.
I added your link to my list of good articles about writing.
Juneat @ Writer’s Gambit
Thanks so much! I appreciate the shout out.
I’ve been reading a lot on this subject lately. Your post was the most straightforward I’ve read so far. Mind I like short and to the point posts. Thanks for the information, as usual.
Glad it was useful!
Oh, great! Definitely a premise if worth even revising it to be sure it si on the right path!
Definitely! It’s always worth the extra effort to refine a premise upfront – rather than discovering down the line it doesn’t have enough worth to deserve an entire story.
Thank you so much for all your posts. My comment is in reference to story premise #3. Does the characters objective have to remain the same throughout the story? My character ‘thinks’ her life needs to be lived a certain way. But, by the end she gets what she needs and it’s almost the opposite of what she originally thought she needed.
The character will have two “goals” (although he won’t always be conscious of both in the beginning): the Thing He Wants and the Thing He Needs. The Thing He Needs is what (in a positive story) he will end up discovering by the end. He may or may not end up gaining the Thing He Wants, particularly since the Thing He Wants can often be getting in the way of the Thing He Needs. More on that here: https://www.helpingwritersbecomeauthors.com/2014/02/character-arcs-3.html
Thanks a bunch, the link was very helpful. I figured I was doing okay, just wanted to be sure.
Loved this spost. There’s an idea for a new story floating in my mind and I can’t pin it down. I’m going to try following your methode 🙂
How fun! Nothing beats a new story idea.
This is phenomenal. The graphic alone is worth the time to read the article but your idea of breaking the six story elements down into a series of questions is genius. Anyone who takes this and fills in the blanks is going to have a solid outline for a great story at the end.
Thanks for the freebie! I’m printing it and using it for every novel going forward with all credit to you, of course.
You bet! Glad you enjoyed the infographic!
Patterns, “and” formulas… totally, we can identify the reality that we’re part of via these.
And thus, that’s how we transcend, whether as artists, trying to create a great work of art, or (my own ambition) as a just very species of being, trying to leave this dimension of reality behind for another: finally becoming, and then sustaining awareness of these such two..
The Representative both fulfils, “and” falls short.. It establishes character, it establishes their situation, it establishes their enemy, their objective and so on: it only however fails to progress beyond all this, its very identity as a whole being to just announce it all.
Ultimately, I think this is what we’re all striving for: to both adhere to and transcend the patterns of good art.
An expert summing up.
Yeah, I’ve basically got all these in my stories. Thanks for going to the trouble of showing the diagram; it’s great for visual people like me. 😉
Oh, but, ah, I’ve read lots of successful stories that don’t begin with the main character, they begin with a situation – how would we classify it? One of my stories begins with a situation, a battle – the main ‘character’ doesn’t appear until Ch3. I’ve introduced the ‘antagonist’ and the situation first because it is both the catalyst for bringing the protagonist into the story and for behaving badly later.
It’s true we see this technique quite often. Not that this is a hard and fast rule, but I always recommend authors to figure out a way to start with their main character. It can make all the difference in hooking readers right from the start.
Starting with the protagonist in my stories would make them start slowly; the protagonist is simply living their life as they normally do until something happens. My first two novels begin this way, with the protagonist going about their daily life and then getting dragged into something they couldn’t imagine was going to happen when they started out for the office that morning.
Like in the example above, the protagonist reacts to what the antagonist does, not the other way round.
If I do what you suggest, I’d have to rewrite my stories and that would be odd, I think. That’s just my feeling about.
The protagonist doesn’t immediately get into a scrap, the antagonist does. The antagonist starts a fight, the protagonist tries to deal with it. Sometimes the protagonist has to pull a rabbit out of a hat to deal with it. I don’t see this as magic so much as someone engaged in lateral thinking in a difficult or challenging situation.
Bascially, what you’re saying is this wouldn’t work for you. Is that right?
Element #1: there is no main ‘hero’; many heroes emerge throughtout the story as it progresses. They each have a role to play and either succeed or fail. Many emotional journeys are followed, not one single journey – however, one journey emerges as ‘the’ emotional journey. The stakes are high for all; but one group emerges with more to lose than the others. ‘Whom do you find the most interesting?’ I’m rooting for the team with the most to lose. The plot was inspired by a previous story – this story is like the backstory about how one particular group became to be in this situation though not covered in the first. Who will take full advantage of the plots possibilities? That’s the twist in the plot – that is revealled late in the story.
Element #2: the story starts with war between two groups indirectly linked with the protagonist – I mean, both of these battling groups are linked with the protagonist, one more than the other; the ‘heroes’ condition at this point is the status quo; the ‘heroes’ condition is changed when the antagonist comes knocking on their door, of course.
Element #3: initially, all ‘heroes’ are pursuing personal goals (working hard to achieve them), until the antagonist comes knocking and these goals are put on hold – knew goals emerge from the interaction; the choices the ‘heroes’ make in order to get back to what they were initially pursuing will astound them making them question whether those goals were worth pursuing in the first place, until they are fading memories.
Element #4: the anatagonist wants what the ‘heroes’ and the others have; the antagonist tries to take what the ‘heroes’ have by force, forcing the ‘heroes’ into action; the antagonist has been around for ages, in the ‘heroes’ peripheral vision like an annoying mosquito, and that’s all the antagonist has been, until the antagonist surprises them by doing something they least expect.
Element #5: the disaster is the antagonist surprising the hell outta the unprepared ‘heroes’; it is the antagonist’s desire to have what the ‘heroes’ have and has always wanted but was denied – the antagonist has evolved; the ‘protagonist’ is unprepared for the antagonist and antagonist’s behavior presents the protagonist with a moral dilemma; the antagonist responds as the protagonist responds until the antagonist is outplayed, like a game of chess.
Element #6: the stories main ‘conflict’ is the ‘protagonist’ facing a moral dilemma; the ‘protagonist’ is torn between two choices neither or which is appealling; the antagonist is not so much at cross-purposes with the ‘protagonist’, except initially in wanting what the ‘protagonist’ has, and the protagonist not at all willing to give it up; but the protagonist is placed at a crossroads not of their choosing; the situation has placed them at the crossraods; then the plot twist occurs – the protagonist thinks the ‘heroes’ have saved the day, and their collective asses (everyone affected by the antagonist), only to learn there was a second wave of conflict following the first albeit hidden behind the first wave of conflict but exposed by it leaving them with nowhere to run.
It’s a prequel.
This is definitely *not* a hard and fast rule. And I always recommend authors to follow their own feelings about their stories. But, yes, in the vast majority of instances, I find slower character beginnings ultimately much more interesting than faster beginnings that introduce other characters, especially antagonists.
Straight to the pin-up board! Great advice very well put together. Thanks.
Thanks for pinning, Kate!
Nice, specific instructions. I was struggling with defining my premise, so this couldn’t have come at a better time!
Premises can be a lot of fun to construct. Enjoy yourself!
I really loved this post and can clearly see how having all of these questions from the start would help in trying to build a strong outline before writing a novel.
That being said, narrowing down exactly how to portray the premise of my current work in progress in a succinct way that gets the situations and the core of the story across is something I’ve been struggling with for years. The novel consists of dual timelines to tie it (and the series it begins) together. The timelines are more or less on equal standing with all the structure and elements spoken of in this post for both. The present day timeline gives emphasis to the start of the overall series plot , while the past timeline emphasizes the current novel’s story question as a whole and how both timelines feed together.
Can you offer some advice on how to represent both of these in a concise way when offering my “premise” to agents, editors, so on so forth, as well as for myself to strengthen the novel’s core as I dive into my revisions over the next couple months?
Thank you!
Ah yes, the difficulties of dual timelines. What I generally like to do is first write a premise for each timeline, separately. Which best encompasses the heart of the story? That’s probably your best bet for pitching and marketing purposes. But there’s nothing wrong with using both premises to guide you as write.
Thank you! I will try that.
I think that was very brave of you to respond to my massive post, K. 😉 I was having a very verbal moment there. I’m sure you rolled your eyes when you saw my post and thought, what the hell? Who is this guy? Truly, I’m just some guy trying to figure out how to make my writing better … with your help. 😉
Glad to be of help – especially to a regular commenter like you!
This is helpful at the right time… Thanks!
Yay for good timing! 🙂
Great Post. It was really helpful ant clear to the point. Yet I have a few questions. Is the premise sentence equal to the pitch? Or where is the difference?
What if I have two protagonists in my story? Do I write a premise sentence for each one? And in reference to story premise #4: Can a character be protagonist and antagonist at the same time?
Yes, the premise sentence can definitely be used as a pitch.
You don’t *have* to write a premise sentence for each character, but it can definitely be a good exercise for figuring out the heart of each character’s story, and, indeed, which character *is* the heart of the story.
A character will always be the protagonist of his own story. But it’s very possible the protagonist in one plotline could be acting as an antagonist (an obstacle) to another character.
I’m still having a bit of trouble getting my head around the concept of premise. (like airflow over an airfoil produces lift… sure, fine… whatever, just make sure my bags arrive same place/time…)
If outline is pencil sketch on napkin, and structure is the blueprint… then premise is… ? Standing at the curb imagining what structure could fill the open/abandon property? Whether commercial use, office/retail, or residential, and the potential zoning, design, construction obstacles/restrictions faced with? (then to napkin sketch… etc)
Premise is what you write on the zoning form, explaining your intentions. It’s the smallest of summaries – your story whittled down to its core intention.
Great, thank you!
I’ve worked through the post once, so far, will do so a couple more times with that information in mind until I come up with something resembling your examples.
You might also find this post useful: https://www.helpingwritersbecomeauthors.com/story-concept/
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Really helpful. Thank you!
Thank you. In my previous life I was a not-very-good fiction writer. Now I’m a very good nonfiction writer, and I enjoy that, but I’m dipping my toe back into writing fiction. I know what I was not good at and what I was good at. And I’m doing it for fun, so I have room to learn and grow without pressure. I have your books and workbooks and have found them really useful. I love this pointer about premise, and I see where I can go back and do more effective work in that area.
Thank you.
We’re all (hopefully) moving toward improvement. Knowing our strengths and weaknesses is a huge step in the right direction, since it actually gives us a road map of sorts to guide our education.
Very straightforward. Sometimes when coming up with supporting characters and subplots, my protagonist is sometimes overshadowed and main objective is overlooked. This chart will help me keep the characters on track. I’m making it my desktop wallpaper right now so I’ll see it every day when I sit down to write.
Yes, it’s extremely easy (and tempting sometimes) to get derailed by fun minor characters. It’s always worthwhile to keep reminding ourselves of the true focus of the story.
Most comprehensive and helpful post I have read till this date. Premise happened to be something I always had difficulty understanding, much less tackling. But through this post, I have gotten all the necessary tools to construct one myself.
Definitely gonna bookmark it. 😀
Awesome! That’s great to hear. Best of luck writing yours!
Thanks for the wish.
I have even added it on my personalized scrivener template. To be able to use it whenever I start a new project. 🙂
Cool beans! 😀
I loved this post in every way! Thank you so much for sharing. I shall keep this imagery posted in my mind. Spot on!!!
So glad it was useful!
I like how you get straight to the point on explaining this with out droning on and on. <3
This is complete AWESOMESAUCE (they really should put this word in the dictionary). Loved it. Trying to piece together all of your writing process, which I find quite interesting to say the least.
So prior to your outlining and structuring, you definitely have a strong premise. Which makes complete sense. What I have with my draft is pretty much a premise. I need to go back and strengthen it though. I definitely didn’t outline beforehand, but took a lot of notes and had a 3 act structure floating around in my head. But I never sat down and wrote the structure or scenes or the premise for that matter. Even though it has the basic elements.
So what I think I’ll do is take the basic premise and strengthen what I already have. At that point do you think I should try to boil out an entire outline and structure it KM style? Trying to learn the basics and feel like it’s the skeleton on which hangs everything. How could I even edit without it? What would have to fall back on? I’m in employed in the physical therapy profession so I know all about bones and the skeleton. Without it we’re literally shapeless sacks of flesh. Makes perfect sense.
Thanks!
I’d say you need to structure it Benjamin style. 😉 Obviously, I recommend my outlining method and think it’s the best way, but I also believe that it’s not right for every author. So play around with it until you find just the right system to optimize your own creativity.
This is my concept:
A man returns to his hometown to find that his former high school bully is attracted to him.
How would I go from concept to premise?
I don’t understand what a situation means. Is the situation Act 1 before the inciting incident?
And is the disaster the outcome?
Yes, you’re on the right track. Just focus on the specifics of your individual story.
After a new character demanded my attention, I found this post and followed it to get the following:
After their mother’s sudden death, teenager Sigrun wants nothing more than normality to return. However, when they after a public blowup at school find the truth about their non-human heritage, they are faced with the choice of digging deeper into it–or allow a serial killer to go free.
I have a question. My conflict and objective started after the disaster at the end of the second chapter — which I’m hoping would appear at less than 10k words on my story. I’m writing a fanta
sy novel and had no idea if I should present the disaster without introducing the world to have the premise starting. Thanks for the advice! I like your blog, I just discovered it recently.
Although any number of disasters can happen early in your story, *the* disaster is the First Plot Point at the end of the First Act–25% of the way into the story. This gives you plenty of time to set up the characters, their goals, the world, the stakes, and the conflict before shoving your character out of the Normal World and into the “adventure world” of the main conflict.
I appreciate the reply. After replying posting, I added some pseudo objective on my character before *the* disaster happened and with it, a psuedo conflict. I’m going to speak in general here: they will discover that the pseudo objective isn’t what they really want and discover their real objective during the real conflict.
Anyways, I hope the execution turns out good.
Sometimes a protagonist doesn’t fit the “hero” mold.
Wendy starts with a Want (to not have to grow up) but not the type of Goal that drives the story. She meets Peter and willingly goes to Never Never Land — not a disaster. Then she’s sucked into the conflict between Peter and Capt Hook. Peter, being the boy who never grows up, must have a Flat Arc; Wendy is the one who changes (by realizing it would not be a good idea to never grow up).
Dorothy Wants to leave home, but meets the con artist and from then on her Goal is to go home and reassure Auntie Em that she is OK. She does arrive at Oz via a disastrous tornado. She is sucked into the conflict between the Wizard and the one remaining Bad Witch.
Alice is curious about the rabbit in a waistcoat. She arrives in Wonderland by disastrously falling down a rabbit hole, and then she has a Goal of going home, but doesn’t seem to desire it as intensely as Dorothy. The nonsense is a key part of the story — without the nonsense, it just wouldn’t be the same even though all the story structure would still be there. Her Goal is basically to satisfy her curiosity by observing all the nonsense, or am I missing something?
Scrooge Wants to be left alone to count his money, but Needs to reconnect with his humanity. When he meets his late partner’s ghost, is that a disaster? He willingly goes to the Special World (his past) with the first Ghost; is that a disaster? His Goal is to watch whatever the spirits have to show him and to “profit” by it.
Fun Fact: Both “Ebenezer” and “Scrooge” are Hebrew names meaning “generous.”
My main character Wants to obey his controlling mom (specifically, by finding a rich doctor to marry) and to please or help others generally, but Needs to think for himself and make his own decisions (including not to marry for a while) — something like that. His disaster occurs on page 1 when his arranged marriage falls through and he finds himself in a strange country (his Normal World is covered thru flashbacks and conversations). The obstacle to finding a rich doctor to marry is very simple: there aren’t any his age, or if there are, they don’t want him (probably because he’s a mama’s boy). He discovers a community of people who are addicted to extreme experiences — from our POV, they abuse each other. His fascination with this community, and finding out the unbelievable truth(s) about what they do, distracts him from his rich-doctor-finding mission, and he accidentally proposes to one of them. He decides to play undercover detective (so he deceives his new friends, ready to betray them). As people tell him more, he learns how unsuitable his new fiancee is, and he tries to talk her out of her hobby/lifestyle. He is arrested for drunkenness, tells the cop what he’s learned, and spends a night in the loony bin. He gets to visit the mysterious “club” and sees that the stories are true, and while there he stands up to his fiancee on an issue of right and wrong, and he also has a “fall” and participates in the “abuse.” His fiancee sees in him what she has become, and decides to take his advice and quit the hobby/lifestyle and cut ties with everyone involved–including him. His deceit is discovered and he is rejected by the community. As a denoument, he gets back in touch with his mom and this time he sets the rules/boundaries.
can the objective be after the disaster? For my character, the story goal is when the disaster actually happens. He makes a deal with the granddaughter of a woman he killed.
Yes. The character will have related goals throughout the First Act, but they won’t always solidify into *the* main story goal until after the First Plot Point.
Thank you
Is this a good premise?
Heartless and cynical orphan Abaddon (protagonist) used to spend his life enacting revenge on innocent villages (situation)… till he killed the Oracle (disaster). In order to preserve himself and ensure survival (objective), he makes a deal that sends him on a journey about his heritage and on the run from a delusional cult (opponent).
Good job!
I love that I can come back to an article years after it was written, and find new comments – complete with responses from you.
I’m struggling with my premise right now, but I’ve just realized that, while the story I am plotting is nothing like Star Wars, the premise you’ve listed as an example really does fit my story line…. I’m not sure whether to laugh or cry!
I just realized that the concept for my crime novel talks about the antagonist, not the protagonist! So when it comes to the premise, which DOES involve the protagonist–a police detective–things get confusing.
Concept: Learning that his secret lover was actually his biological daughter, a narcissistic sybarite commits murder and arranges a kidnapping in an attempt to conceal his unknowing mistake. (This is only revealed at the climax of the novel.)
Premise: Maverick Police Detective Zank puts his reputation and his career on the line in pursuit of a truth neither his colleagues nor his superiors can see. But the truth he discovers is so toxic he can’t bring himself to reveal it to the authorities, much less to the abducted boy’s mother, whom he has come to love.
I’m pretty happy with the premise, but the concept–which reveals the secret at the heart of the mystery–can’t be used as a long line because it’s a spoiler! I need help!
Yes, I wouldn’t use the concept line in marketing, since it gives away so much.
Reworking the Concept to more closely align with the premise (and get rid of the spoilers!)
Concept: the premature death of a cancer patient, the abduction of a child and his babysitter, the untimely murder of a mobster and a belated demand for ransom: seemingly random clues that lead a detective to someone desperate to hide a terrible secret.