Coincidences in Fiction: What You’re Doing Wrong

Coincidences in Fiction: What You’re Doing Wrong

Coincidences are awesome. In real life. But coincidences in fiction? Unfortunately, the same rules don’t apply. In fact, a poor use of coincidences in your story can make or break your readers’ ability to suspend their disbelief and enjoy your plot.

In real life, coincidences are (usually) cool. They’re inexplicable, seeming freaks of destiny that tickle our brains with their mystery. When the teller at the bank turns out to be the little neighbor girl you played with as a kid or when you find the perfect outfit at a garage sale or when a flat tire delays you enough to keep you out of a seven-car pileup on the Interstate–those are all awesomesauce. Our brains delight in the impossible happenstance of it all. It’s like a fairy gift: all the niftier because it’s unexpected and unexplained.

But here’s the thing about coincidences in fiction: readers are expecting a gift and they want it to be explained.

We believe in the crazy things that happen in real life, simply because we have no choice: there’s the proof right there in front of us. We have to believe it. It happened! It’s real!

Fiction, however, ain’t real, and we all know it. When the author lets fall a coincidence right out of the sky, readers instinctively reject it. They know this isn’t a true coincidence. In fact, it’s totally explicable: the author caused it to happen because he was too lazy to think of anything better.

Not quite the reaction you’re going for your in the fiction? Me either. Today let’s tackle the causes and remedies for coincidences.

Are Bad Coincidences Killing Your Story’s Cause and Effect?

Coincidences in fiction make readers mad. Got it. But why do they make readers mad? Why don’t readers believe in them?

Simply because coincidences are, by their very nature, a violation of cause and effect. A coincidence is something that happens for no obvious reason. No reason means no cause. Basically, we’re getting an effect out of the blue. Usually, this effect is something positive for the character and, as a result, something neither the character nor the author has earned.

Secrets of Story Well Told William C MartellEven just one ripple in your story’s progression of cause and effect can throw your entire plot off kilter. In his book Secrets of Story: Well Told, screenwriter William C. Martell likened cause and effect to a game of tennis, in which the protagonist and antagonist bat the conflict back and forth between them. As he points out, even the metaphor of a back-and-forth tennis game falls apart when the author tries to introduce a coincidence:

Here’s where plotting often breaks down in bad scripts–after the initial “serve” the protagonist or antagonist quit playing for a while, and the ball bounces back and forth on its own. That’s impossible, and we know it. Or, the ball is hit to some other player on some other court; and even if the ball is hit back to our court and our protagonist, it isn’t really part of the game, is it? When something (good or bad) happens without reason, it seems impossible. It’s that ball bouncing back on its own. Or, the protagonist swings his racquet and misses, but the ball hits a bird flying over the court and goes back to the antagonist’s side of the net. That just doesn’t seem within the rules!  We want the ball to bounce back and forth between the antagonist and protagonist–the Hero and Villain–each reacting to what the other has done.


This kind of intricate cause and effect should be true on every level of your story, but nowhere more so than in the major revelations and plot turns. Consider yours carefully. What is causing these moments to happen? Is it the protagonist who is causing the antagonist to move–and vice versa? Or are side events wiggling in to push the story forward?

If the latter has happened, you need to stop and consider which of the following two possibilities are responsible:

 1. You’re not taking advantage of the existing back-and-forth conflict between protagonist and antagonist.

2. The conflict between the protagonist and antagonist wasn’t strong enough to begin with, so you’ve tried to substitute with a side conflict.

Neither will put you on the path to a seamless plot.

Is There Ever Such a Thing as Good Coincidences in Fiction?

Before we get too carried away with our coincidence bashing, let’s take a second to consider whether it’s true all coincidences are bad.

Short answer: no.

Pixar storyboard artist Emma Coats famously recorded one of Pixar’s “22 Rules of Storytelling” as:

Coincidences to get characters into trouble are great; coincidences to get them out of it are cheating.

At some point in almost every story, there is going to be something coincidental that kicks off the plot. What is it that first brings the protagonist and antagonist into opposition? Often, it’s a coincidence:

  • Roger Thornhill accidentally hailing the page boy who is looking for a government agent in Alfred Hitchcock’s North by Northwest.
  • Harvey Cheyne falling into the ocean and being rescued by fisherman Manuel who just happened to be there in Rudyard Kipling’s Captains Courageous.
  • Katniss’s sister Prim just happening to be drawn as a tribute in her first eligible year in Suzanne Collins’s Hunger Games.

Hunger Games Tribute

  • D’Artagnan just happening to insult Athos, Porthos, and Aramis on his first day in town in Alexandre Dumas’s The Three Musketeers.
  • Flik (speaking of Pixar) catching just the end of the circus bugs’ Robin Hood act and believing they’re really warriors in A Bug’s Life.

All of these things just happen. Although there’s some causal dominoes leading the protagonists up to a few of these examples, there’s not enough cause in play here to let any of these moments avoid being coincidences.

And yet they still work. Why? Because they only make things harder–and more interesting–for the characters. You’ll also note these major coincidences are pretty much the only major unexplained coincidences in their stories. It’s not on Pixar’s list, but we could add to their above rule:

Only one major coincidence per story: early in the story.

4 Ways to Sidestep Coincidences in Fiction

Now that we know coincidences in fiction are baaaaad news, how do we stomp them when we see them coming? Here are four ways.

1. Set Up Proper Cause and Effect

As you’ve already figured out, this is the big gun in your war on coincidences. A story that is set up with proper cause and effect is a story that doesn’t need coincidences. What does cause and effect look like?

  • First, Darth Vader invades Princess Leia’s ship in search of the Death Star plans.
  • Then the droids crashland on Tatooine to escape him–which, coincidentally, turns out to be the home of Vader’s unwitting son (except–aha!–it’s not actually a coincidence, since Leia was above Tatooine on purpose, looking for Obi-Wan, who is also on Tatooine on purpose to watch over Luke. The only real coincidence at play here is Luke’s uncle just happening to buy the droids).
  • Then the stormtroopers come looking for the droids and torch Luke’s aunt and uncle.
  • Then Luke goes with Obi-Wan to find Leia.
  • Then the Death Star captures them.
  • Etc. Etc. Etc.

It’s a dance–a tennis match–back and forth. The Empire makes a move, which provokes Luke into making a move, which causes the Empire to make a counter-move. No coincidences necessary.

2. Embed Coincidences in Character Motivation

Your character causes something to happen because he’s in pursuit of a goal. He’s in pursuit of that goal in the first place because something is motivating him. In short, the character’s motivation is the reason for the effect. If readers understand what your character wants and why, they will be more likely to forgive what might otherwise seem coincidental behavior.

Darth Vader suddenly going rogue and pitching the Emperor into the heart of the Death Star, in order to save a dying Luke, might seem a little coincidental on its surface. It might even seem like that most egregious coincidence of all: deus ex machina. But it’s not, because it is, in fact, an evolution of Vader’s personal development and motivation over the course of the trilogy. When he chooses Luke over Palpatine in the end, it makes sense.

Vader kills the Emperor Star Wars Return of the Jedi

If it makes sense, it’s not a coincidence.

3. Foreshadow Coincidences

Now, it’s time for a caveat and an admission: as much as you want to avoid coincidences in your story, you probably won’t be able to cut out 100% of them. Stories–especially novel-length ones–are unwieldy beasts at the best of times. Even the most skilled authors rarely get all the loose threads perfectly tied away (just ask Charles Dickens, who was a master of the coincidence). Sometimes, you’re just plain going to need to sneak in a little coincidence, in order to get the story to work.

When that happens, you need to do your best to make the pill an easy one (yea, preferably an unnoticeable one) for readers to swallow. One way to do that is by foreshadowing the coincidental element earlier in the story. Even if the plot development doesn’t properly result from natural cause and effect, at least it won’t catch readers completely off guard.

4. Explain Away Coincidences

You can also do a little mopping up after the fact. After the necessary coincidence has taken place, don’t just ignore it. Sometimes having your characters acknowledge the coincidence in passing–or offer their explanation for what just happened, as we often do in real life in the wake of a coincidence–can help scratch the little niggle of doubt in your readers’ brains. Being upfront with readers keeps you from looking like idiot (Wow, did she really not even realize she wrote that coincidence?), and with a little luck and a lot of skill, you might even be able to explain away half the problem by the time you’re done.

Once you understand why coincidences in fiction happen–and when it’s okay and when it’s not–you can use your awareness to protect readers from ever tripping into gaping plot holes or suspense-of-disbelief pitfalls.

Wordplayers, tell me your opinion! What coincidences in fiction can you think of that worked–and what coincidences drove you nuts as a reader or viewer? Tell me in the comments!

Coincidences in Fiction: What You’re Doing Wrong

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  1. After reading this blog post, I was despondent. I had a MAJOR coincidence in the middle of the story and I thought that I had no way to get rid of it. Alas, after weeks of pondering and praying about it, I removed the coincidence and my story flows much better already. Thank you!

    • K.M. Weiland | @KMWeiland says

      Awesome! It’s amazing to me how the story blocks we often think are surmountable are often cured relatively easily for the betterment of the story.

  2. Rachel Griffin-Morken says

    Looking for a Writer.
    I have experienced numerous coincidences to be a coincidence! Anyone who’s interested in writing my story?

    I’ve told some of my story to others & they said I should write a book. Since then, I had an extreme amount of unbelievable events – mostly unlawful acts committed against me & my Dependents! No One’s willing to help from the Govt’s Staffs & their Collaborators. They’re the ones who did the most damages by keeping the Funds to remove Toxins in our home! Due to the negligence by the Ins. Co! And, when reported to the commissioner of D.O.C, DHS, DHHS & Others, they qualified me for the multiple Grants & Housing Rehab Funds, which none of the projects were implemented! Hence, we had to breathe these Toxins for many years! Effected since ’92, Jan/’03 – when Ins Co didn’t complete the Clean-up job from the Frozen water pipe that broke in January made my 80% Finished Bsmt into a Lake for over 1 week+! Ins Co kept charging for the Finished Bsmt when they’d knew it was gutted due to mold, fungicide, Lead Dust & Asbestos…and more. Grants were kept by the State Leaders, even the Settlement for the Wrongfully foreclosed Homeowners! And, They’re doing everything to discredit me. Entries into their systems with Slander & false & inaccurate info!

    Many coincidence that have occurred…Too many to be a coincidence! It’s beyond belief! I have evidence of these & their unlawful acts.

    I’m looking for someone to help me write my story. I will compensate 50% of my net Settlement & profits. Please let anyone else know who may be willing to help me. Thank you.

  3. Oliver Ford says

    Most stories that have a love triangle have a scene where one character happens to see the other two in an intimate moment (or one they assume is intimate). That’s a coincidence, but other than being overused it’s OK because it gets the character into trouble. It sets up further conflict.

    What wouldn’t be good is having one character in the triangle taken out of the conflict by a coincidence. You can having a few coincidences to get your characters into trouble, but their own actions need to resolve the trouble.

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