5 Elements of a Riveting Opening Line

The opening line of your book is your first (and possibly last) opportunity to grab your reader’s attention and give them a reason to read your story. That’s a gargantuan job for a single sentence. But if we break down excellent opening lines, we discover a number of interesting things. One of the most surprising discoveries is that very few opening lines are memorable.

Say what?

Before you start quoting the likes of such classic (and highly memorable first lines) as “Call me Ishmael” and “It is a truth universally acknowledged…”, take a moment to think about the last few books you read and loved. Can you remember the opening lines? And yet the very fact that these unremembered lines convinced us to keep reading until we loved the books means they did their jobs to sparkly perfection.

5 Elements of Opening Lines That Hook Readers

I looked up the first lines of five of my favorite reads from the last year:

“When I wake up, the other side of the bed is cold.”–The Hunger Games by Suzanne Collins

“From a little after two oclock [sic] until almost sundown of the long still hot weary dead September afternoon they sat in what Miss Coldfield still called the office because her father had called it that—a dim hot airless room with the blinds all closed and fastened for forty-three summers because when she was a girl someone had believed that light and moving air carried heat and the dark was always cooler, and which (as the sun shone fuller and fuller on that side of the house) became latticed with yellow slashes full of dust motes which Quentin thought of as being flecks of the dead old dried paint itself blown inward from the scaling blinds as wind might have blown them.”–Absalom, Absalom! by William Faulkner

“It was night again. The Waystone Inn lay in silence, and it was a silence of three parts.”–The Name of the Wind by Patrick Rothfuss

“They used to hang men at Four Turnings in the old days.”–My Cousin Rachel by Daphne du Maurier

“On the night he had appointed his last among the living, Dr. Ben Givens did not dream, for his sleep was restless and visited by phantoms who guarded the portal to the world of dreams by speaking relentlessly of this world.”–East of the Mountains by David Guterson

What make these lines work? What about them makes us want to read on? Let’s break them down into five parts.

4 Steps to a Riveting Opening Line Infographic

(Featured in the Structuring Your Novel Workbook.)

1. Inherent Question

All these opening lines end with an invisible question mark.

  • Why is the other side of the bed cold?
  • Why are these characters sitting in a hot, dark room?
  • How can silence be divided into three separate parts?
  • Who did they hang in the old days—and why don’t they hang them anymore?
  • Why and how has Ben Givens appointed the time of his death?

It’s not enough to tell readers what’s happening in your story; you have to give them just enough information to make them ask the questions, so you can answer them.

2. Character

Most of these opening lines give us a character (and the rest quickly introduce their characters in the sentences that follow). Your first line is the first opportunity readers have to meet and become interested in your main character. Faulkner and Guterson ramp this principle to the max by immediately naming their characters, which allows readers another degree of connection.

3. Setting

Most of these opening lines also offer a sense of setting. In particular, Faulkner, du Maurier, and Rothfuss use their settings to impart a deep sense of foreboding and to set the tone of the book.

Modern authors are often shy of opening with description, but a quick, incisive intro of the setting not only serves to ground the reader in the physicality of the story, but also to hook their interest and set the stage.

In Worlds of Wonder, David Gerrold explains that

[Opening lines] that hook you immediately into the hero’s dilemma almost always follow the hook with a bit of stage setting.

The opening line doesn’t have to stand alone. It is supported by and leads into the scaffolding of all the sentences and paragraphs that follow.

4. Sweeping Declaration

Only one of our example books (du Maurier’s) opens with a declaration. Some authors feel this is another technique that’s fallen by the wayside, along with the omniscient narrators of Austen and Tolstoy. But the declaration is still alive and well, no matter what point of view you’re operating from.

The trick is using the declaration to make readers ask that inherent question we talked about above. “The sky is blue” or “a stitch in time saves nine” are the kind of yawn-infested declarations that lead nowhere. But if you dig a little deeper—something along the lines of William Gibson’s “The sky above the port was the color of television, tuned to a dead channel”—you find not only a bit of poetry, but also a sense of tone and the questions of why? that make readers want to keep going.

5. Voice

Finally, in every one of our examples we find the introduction of voice. Your authorial voice in general, and the voice of this story in particular, is your readers’ introduction to you. Your first line is your “hello.” Don’t waste it. Is your book funny, snarky, wistful, sad, or poetic? Make sure readers find that core element in your opening line. If your story is a lyrical tragedy, don’t hand readers a joke at the beginning.


Opening lines provide your first and best opportunity to make a statement about your story. Play around until you find something that perfectly introduces your story’s character, plot, setting, theme, and voice. Your opening line may be as short as Suzanne Collins’s. It may be as long as William Faulkner’s. It may be flashy, or it may be straightforward. Whatever the case, make sure it’s an appropriate starting line for the grand adventure that is your story.

Wordplayers, tell me your opinions! Do you remember the opening line of the last good book you read? Tell me in the comments!

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  1. @Liberty: The essence is what’s important. Last lines rarely stick with me either, but the endings, if they’re good, always do.

    @Phy: Like that first one, especially.

  2. Great advice for how to begin strong! : ) Beth

  3. Thanks for stopping by, Beth! Glad you enjoyed the post.

  4. A successful first line uses the same fuel as a riveting story uses. In a word: Conflict.

    Whether the confict is obvious, like the gunslinger, or more implicit like ” Well, Prince, Genoa and Lucca are now no more than private estates of the Bonaparte family” from War & Peace, it’s all about conflict.

    Whether it’s in yo’ face or just hinted at, first lines that use conflict draw a reader in.

    But that’s just my humbly informed opinion. I don’t have no kids, so I might not know what I’m talking about.

  5. Totally agree. The implicit question in the first line almost always hinges around conflict, either hinted at or explicit. You know what they say – no conflict, no story!

  6. “They killed the white girl first.”
    Toni Morrison, Paradise.

    That first line fully achieves shock effect. I remember reading it and thinking, “But the book is called Paradise! What HAPPENED??” And just like that, she got me. 🙂

    Great pointers. Thanks. 🙂

  7. Toni Morrison is a master of beginning in medias res and hooking readers with killer first lines.

  8. I can’t think of a single opening line, even to my favorite books!

  9. I know! Crazy, isn’t it?

  10. Well I’m late to the party here but someone got two of my favorites — Toni Morrison – “They killed…” , Stephen King – “The man in black…”

    But, nobody mentioned my all time favorite.

    “It was a pleasure to burn.” Fahrenheit 451

    Now It took me years to like the book. But that opening line was so memorable and lyrical and horrible it drew mw back again and again until at last I was doomed to get it and love it.

  11. Toni Morrison’s is especially great.

  12. Oh thanks! What a timely read. Even though I knew this, I didn’t execute it in my current manuscript. Thanks for being my muse this morning! Great site. Got your RSS on my Yahoo page.

  13. We can know so many things on an unconscious level, but not until we embrace them consciously and deliberately can we really take full advantage of them. So glad you’re enjoying the site!

  14. Leila Wilson says

    Thank you for this very interesting and useful post. I found you today from reading “My Name is Not Bob” and following the links he always recommends and have signed up for your news letter et al and also bought three of your books from Amazon UK.

    I feel that while the first sentence does not necessarily mean that the rest of the book will be good, nevertheless without a first sentence that grabs the reader immediately, she or he may not bother to read any further. When I’m browsing for a book to read I always have a look at tbe opening lines first. A recent book I read and thoroughly enjoyed was “AZINCOURT” by Bernard Cornwall. Here is the opening sentence which hooked me straight away…….”On a winter’s day in 1413, just before Christmas, Nicholas Hook decided to commit murder”……Yes, I bought it!

  15. Thanks for stopping by – and for buying the books! You just became my Favorite Person of the Day. 😉

    I absolutely agree that a first line isn’t always an indication of the book to follow. I’ve read plenty of brilliant books with boring first lines. But if the author can demonstrate his skill right from the beginning, I’m much more inclined to believe he’s going to display that skill throughout the book.

  16. The opening line of my WIP…SKINWALKER JUSTICE.
    A set of glowing red eyes peered out of the inky depths of the ancient lava tube at the young couple.

    If you can’t get them on the train…they ain’t gonna make the trip.

  17. Tuesday was a fine California day, full of sunshine and promise, until Harry Lyon had to shoot someone at lunch.
    – Dragon Tears, Dean Koontz

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